User:Jacob Khorsandi/Cellestine Ware/Aphrodeities Peer Review

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Jacob Khorsandi (and group)
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Lead
- Not sure if the lead has been drafted yet, but I'm not able to see anything under the subheading

- In general there's definitely a lot of good points about Ware's ideology and notability in the 'Black Feminism' and 'Ware's Beliefs' sections so I can see what would be included here

Article Structure
- The headings are a bit inconsistent and seemingly out of order, but this is probably just because of the drafting process.

- 'Black Feminism' and 'Ware's Beliefs' section have overlap/could have aspects combined because they both detail her ideology, especially in the context of the White middle class feminist mainstream

- 'New York Radical Feminists' section is a bit short, but I think the size of the heading is also throwing me off because it's making me expect a much more extensive section. I would consider combining this with the section about her book, with both being subheadings under a larger heading like "Feminist Action" or "Contributions to Black Feminism"

- Inconsistencies with the capitalization of 'Black'

Content
- Content does a good job of citation, has a neutral perspective, I like the integration of Ware's quote

- I think that there's a lot of instances of vague language throughout that need examples and citations -- "Consciousness raising was a trending movement by American Feminists during the late 1960's" -- what type of consciousness? "She took a constructive approach that demanded that Black women take initiative in proactive engagement and participation instead of being idle" -- proactive engagement and participation in what? Though it can be deduced that it's about engagement in feminist action, it doesn't read smoothly and assertively

- In reference to "Ware's Belief Section" What art does Ware make? Her writing?

- In the "Black Feminism" section - how did she advocate for Black women to become more involved in feminist action (after citation 4).