User:Jacob Khorsandi/Cellestine Ware/Awesomeaxolotl Peer Review

General info
Jacob Khorsandi and group
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Cellestine Ware
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):No current version (new article)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):No current version (new article)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * There doesn't appear to be a lead section in the article. I would include a brief section outlying her role in radical black feminism and possibly the groups she was involved in.

Content


 * The content is all largely relevant and interesting. The focus is placed on her activism and beliefs, as would be expected. If possible depending on the sources available, I would try to include a bit more about her personal life, including possible marriages, children, her later life, etc. I think the content in the section titled "ware's beliefs" could be slightly more flushed out and include references to her book.

Tone and Balance


 * You guys do a great job of keeping a neutral tone.

References


 * Briefly looking through your sources, it appears that you have a good number of academic articles and they reflect current academic attitudes on black feminism. Your references reach the number necessary to be deemed "notable" by Wikipedia. While you have the books and articles cited, I would include links to where to find them online so people can reach them easier. The last link to the review on Cellestine Ware's book should just be cited once, not three times. Also, when I clicked into the article, JSTOR made it seem like there was no article to read but that could have just been a thing with my computer. In a couple section of the article's body there are not many citations, so I would link more of the statements back to your sources (even if you're just linking the same one).

Organization


 * I'm a little confused by the article's structure. Are the sections titled "Woman Power" and "New York Radical Feminists" supposed to be under the article's body? I think the "Woman Power" section can be folded into the section on Ware's beliefs and the "New York Radical Feminists" section can fit under black feminism, either by itself or a subsection. The writing is largely without grammatical errors, but you should revise the section on "Ware's Beliefs" because there are some capitalization and sentence structure mistakes. Also this is a small thing, but the headings kinda switch in font/size style.

Overall, I think you guys do a good and thorough job outlining Cellestine Ware's black feminist activism and beliefs. The strongest sections of your article highlight her role in black feminism and the idea expressed in her writing. Although I can tell there are slightly different writing styles in each section, they generally hold to Wikipedia's neutral and encyclopedic writing style. I think the main aspects of your article that can be improved are the organization and grammar and spelling, which should be quick revisions. Great start to your article!