User:Jacob Khorsandi/Cellestine Ware/SKUCLA Peer Review

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(provide username) Jacob Khorsandi
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Lead: The article does not seem to include to a lead. It would be beneficial to include one as it gives the reader a concise understanding of the significance of Cellestine Ware.

Content: The content of the work is very well conveyed. I like how you included a great amount of detail for each section. Further, the content you gave for each section was nicely worded and to the point. I think there was a little bit of ambiguity that can be cleared up in the section on "Black Feminism". All the content of this work definelty allows the reader to get a good sense of who Cellestine Ware was, especially in regard to her literary work.

Tone and Balance: The article was well worded in that it gives over a neutral tone. I don't feel any bias towards any part of the article. You did a great job of excluding your own opinions and focusing on the cold facts. This plays a great impact on the overall tone of your work. Further, the work appears to be quite balanced with appropriate information for each section. If it possible to add more information to the early life and education section according to your research, I believe that will be very beneficial to the readers understanding of Cellestine Ware.

Sources and References: I was only able to access sources 5 -7 as these were the ones with direct links. You did a fine job referencing appropriate sources throughout the work and the diversification of sources assisted in bringing multiple routes of information into the overall understanding of Cellestine Ware. I would add which sources you used for the section of early life. It is important to cite sources appropriately as it directs the reader to the route of the information.

Organization: I liked the way in which the work was split up section by section. It is a great start. The section split up is nicely done as it allows for appropriate information to be inputed in the right section. This allows the reader to stay focused and not get lost in the information. Adding a lead section would be beneficial to the overall flow of the page as well.

For new articles, Notability: I think this article does a great job in displaying the significance of Cellestine Ware as it shows different details in various facets of her life and achievements. From her early life to the her contemporary achievements and legacy, you did a good job in portraying her work. I think it would be good to also include more detail, if possible, on the section of "Ware's beliefs".

Overall Impressions: I really enjoyed reading work on Cellestine Ware. Prior to reading this, I had little knowledge on who Cellestine Ware was and what her role was in the feminist movement. In my opinion, the author of this work did several things really well. I really liked the way in which the sections were split up. I think it was well detailed and nicely worded in a neutral fashion, for the most part. I would suggest adding a lead section and tying up the information to the appropriate sources. These two changes can improve your work tremendously. Overall, really well done!