User:JacquelineB3/Carrying capacity/EmlyCole Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JacquelineB3


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 * User:JacquelineB3/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Carrying capacity

Evaluate the drafted changes
Please move your work to your article sandbox!

Lead
You have updated the lead to reflect the information added. The lead that exists as an updated version still has a concise introductory sentence, and is overall a strong lead. The information included in the rest of the lead becomes wordy and could be divided into its own category as much of the information found in the following sentences of the lead are not found elsewhere in this article. Overall the lead is overly detailed, but dividing it between the lead and possibly a section on limiting factors and birth/death rates will increase the clarity of the overall article as well as help highlight the additions you have made to the lead.

Content
The information you added into your draft incudes much of the information in the lead as well as reorganization of the equations variable in the section 'factors'. The editing of the factors section made the clarity better and helped with ease of reading. The information you have added into the lead is all very relevant to the topic, as well as up to date. There is no info added that does not belong. There is a lot of suggestions in your topics talk page that can be incorporated into the article to continue your contributions, as well, there is much talk of controversy in this topic so having multiple viewpoints on carrying capacity represented this article would be good.

Tone and Balance
The content you have added is all neutral, and no claims are biased towards any particular position. as well, the information added does not persuade the reader. The viewpoints in this article are represented equally.

Sources and References
The sources you have used in your article are all recent sources, that come from reliable scientific articles and the UN, which is a reliable organization for information. The links to the sources all work, and reflect the information that has been written from them.

Organization
past the lead the article is well organized. If the information in the lead is broken down into sections than it will really help with the organization and overall structure of the entire article. There was no spelling issues found in your contributions.

Suggestions
I think the reorganization and content you have added is good. Breaking up the lead into a few separate sections with help the article feel more organized and help with the clarity of the article. All your sources are good too. Adding more information to the article as well as more sources is also a good next step.