User:Jadams25/Pillow talk/Aroddy1 Peer Review

Peer review - General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jadams25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Pillow talk - Sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article:
 * Pillow talk - Live page

Peer review - Feedback
Feedback Peer Review for Pillow talk by aroddy1:

Overview:

I think you're off to a good start. The additional information that you have added to your sandbox about Pillow talk is a good addition. I at first thought pillow talk was the same as dirty talk but i was pleasantly surprised. I also thought it was interesting that on the live page pillow talk was an information extraction tool used by spy! wow! :-)

Specifics & Suggestions::

As for my suggestions, I think filling out more information on the body of the subject would help. Likewise, I think cleaning up the sources might help you better direct where and what you want to add next. Furthermore, I think the lead (see Wikipedia lead) on the live article is particularly weak and could use some more information getting added to it. Other than the body and the lead I think it would be a good addition to over some other subjects of it. One subtopic of it that might be interesting to discuss is the "Research" of the topic. I found this study that discusses the challenges of studying communication after sex (pillow talk)... Another subtopic that you may research could be how physiological and physiological effects of pillow talk, in that regard i found this meta-analysis looking into those exact effects.

Another quick pointer that I have is that if you're struggling to find sources or info; try instead looking into studies/ meta-analysis for "communication after sex", instead of 'pillow talk', you may have better luck, as I did (it was hard for me to find info by just looking up the topic of 'pillow talk')..

Closing:

Overall I think you're off to a good start, and I look forward to seeing the final result! GOOD WORK! :-)