User:Jadams46/Writing process/AVB227 Peer Review

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Very well done!

With your changes, the lead paragraph it is more comprehendable. By specifying what writers focus on, you provide a lot of great context for the reader. However, it can be slightly overwhelming to create that long of a sentence with a list. I understand the reasoning for why you did it, but I am unsure if there is another way to approach that. If not, no worries, as I said, it provides a lot more context.

Your additions to the Historical and Contemporary Perspectives section is good. I think that providing a quote from another person elevates the opening paragraph. Not only do readers get the information about Donald M. Murray, but they also are able to get a more recent approach from Van den Bergh.

The creation of the Process Writing Approach is amazing! You provide a clear and concise defintion of what PWA is, while also showing how students use it from every area of the writing world (planners to editors).