User:Jadams46/Writing process/Sugaryshae Peer Review

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Jadams46
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In your lead I was wondering where the citation for page 6 is coming from? Page 6 from what source?

It may be helpful to clarify/give a brief overview in your lead what mental actions are involved in the writing process.

I noticed there are a lot of direct citations coming from your sources, are there ways you could minimize the amount of direct quotations? It may be helpful to put them in your own words to give a clearer understanding of what those scholars are actually saying. If you do insert direct quotations make sure to add a citation so the reader knows where the information is coming from/ can easily access the source.

In your overview of the cognitive model it may be helpful to reorganize the section by placing criticisms of the cognitive model below your explanation of the model. Are there any other scholars that have written on the cognitive process theory of writing besides Flower and Hayes? The section seems like it could be potentially biased by their viewpoints because other scholars are not mentioned.

For you PWA section it may be beneficial to add subsections to break the information up a bit and make it easier to identify what you're discussing. For instance, you could add a subsection about advantages and disadvantages of PWA to organize the information more clearly.

I noticed a majority of your sections don't include linked citations, it would be helpful to see where the information is coming from and if some sources are being relied on too heavily.

Your sections are well-written and you address relevant ideas related to your topic in a clear way, I think a focus on the organization of your article and adding clarifying subsections would help readers navigate the article more seamlessly.

Are you planning on consulting other sources to add additional information to your sections or are the sources you have currently the ones you will be using for this article? You have interesting subsections and I'm curious if other scholars are also writing on the topics.