User:Jadeevelynn/Transfeminism/Mcolonia12 Peer Review

General info
Jadeevelyn, Oliviapants, Troyandabedinthemorn
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jadeevelynn/Transfeminism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Transfeminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
1.I think the drafted changes are very good and can add a lot to the pre-existing article. It goes in depth about the struggle feminists and transgender individuals have had over the years and how this currently affects the movement which I thought was an important addition to the article since it does not talk about this.

2. The article draft has a good structure so far, I do not have any specific recommendations on what can be changed regarding the structure but simplifying and condensing some of the things, especially on the third paragraph, can help readers better understand the point of that specific section. I thought it got kind of wordy in that paragraph but I understood the main ideas, I just felt that for a more general audience it can be hard to digest.

3.The section "Current Issues" is extremely relevant to the contributions to the article but it can be summarized more to make it more digestible for the reader. I do not have any specific things that I would suggest changing about this section, just paraphrasing stuff to make it more accessible.

4.It is a great article draft overall, specially for the first draft. Keep up the good work!.