User:Jadeochoaa/Fox Indian Massacre of 1712/Landon Thomas 23 Peer Review

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 * User:Jadeochoaa/Fox Indian Massacre of 1712
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Summary: I think you did a great job of summarizing this event. You included what this event was and why each side participated in it. The only thing I could see you putting in there is a short sentence of just what the conclusion of this event was and how many casualties there were.

Background Information: I think this is exactly what she is looking for when it comes to your background information. You really dived deep into what life was like before this event and the reader can see why this could have led to the massacre so great job on that.

Content Layout: I think so far you have your layout of your article very well. It has an easy flow that goes in chronological order which is important so that the reader does not get lost when reading your article.

Overall Content: I think you have a great start of information and I can see that you know exactly what you want to improve in your article and I think that you nailed exactly what needs to be improved. The only thing I could recommend you also doing is giving us specific people involved in the massacre so it could give your article some more strength on it.

Sources: I think you have a great start of sources listed down here but I would check even in the sources you already have if those also have sources in there that you could use.