User:Jadeperry99/Elton Fax/Victoriawesloh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jadeperry99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jadeperry99/Elton_Fax?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

LEAD

CONTENT

The content is good! You have a lot of stuff added already. I would maybe focus on adding more text about the specifics of his writings and illustrations, or maybe more information about his awards and grants (like, which book was the one to win the Coretta Scott King award, etc). But I know it also depends unjust what information is available in the sources as well!

You could also possible add more content around what exactly his work was with the Works Project Administration Federal Art Project, or what his lectures were about when he was traveling?

TONE

It's very straight forward and just conveys the facts, no bias.

SOURCES

make sure you link your sources in the text to correspond with the information you're citing, but otherwise your sources look good!

ORGANIZATION

I would break up the career section into different sub-sections, you could possible do 'early life', 'books & illustrations', and 'travel'? Maybe also an awards section.

OVERALL

It's really good so far! I think you have a lot of good information and it is really well-written.