User:Jaelienrivera/Davenport Tablets/ArjunChikkappa Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jaelienrivera


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jaelienrivera/Davenport_Tablets?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Davenport_Tablets

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Comparing this article draft with the current article, Jaelien does an excellent job developing a concise & pertinent lead where one did not exist before. However, improvements in the form of more appropriate wording/ perhaps some grammar tweaks (probably best to check with a writing tutor) could be done, i.e., "As the tablets were being examined, there were some aspects that had many people question their authenticity." could be improved to "As the tablets were being examined, there contained some aspects that lead many to question their authenticity." Additionally, it may be beneficial to the article if an additional sentence or an addition to a current sentence concerning the discovery (specifically who) of the tablets be added, though this is somewhat minor.

Concerning media, it may be beneficial to add a picture of the site these tablets were found or a diagram of the excavations (if one exists).

Returning to the current article (not your draft), the section named "Interpretations" may require some subsections to improve organization, though this again somewhat minor.

Overall, most improvements to this drafting could be done to the wording; the overall structure, content, and huge improvements over the current article (in the form of a new lead), are quite good.

Lastly, concerning the guiding questions: this article is neutral, all the sources are satisfactory, the image provided possesses a satisfactory description... the rest of the attributes of this draft are satisfactory.