User:Jagcataldo/Chad–China relations/Racheltlee Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Jagcataldo
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Jagcataldo/Chad–China relations

Lead
No lead really needed in this article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
In this section: "In addition, in 2011 Chad signed a deal with the Chinese engineering firm CAMC to build a new international airport and road north of N’Djamena financed by a 1-billion-dollar loan from the Chinese government, and with China’s CCECC engineering company to build 1344 km of rail with a 7.5-billion-dollar loan. Other assistance projects in Chad include road development, the construction and renovation of hospitals and the construction of a stadium in N’Djamena. These endeavors were completed, and in his 2011 campaign for his fourth term, Deby asserted that his leadership was improving Chad’s economic situation."

You write that in 2011, deals were signed with China but you also write that these endeavors were completed and Deby asserted in his campaign in 2011 that he had improved Chad's economic situation. I'm assuming these large infrastructure projects were not completed the same year they were signed, so you should change the sentence to include information on when the projects were completed because right now it's a little misleading. Something like:

"In addition, in 2011 Chad signed a deal with the Chinese engineering firm CAMC to build a new international airport and road north of N’Djamena financed by a 1-billion-dollar loan from the Chinese government, and with China’s CCECC engineering company to build 1344 km of rail with a 7.5-billion-dollar loan. Other assistance projects in Chad include road development, the construction and renovation of hospitals and the construction of a stadium in N’Djamena. By 2011, Deby claimed during a campaign for his fourth term that his leadership improved Chad’s economic situation. The projects were finalized in [YEAR]."

I also am not sure that you need a separate subheading for China's benefits from investment in Chad, I think you can incorporate that into the development finance part. Something like China signed a deal on [these terms], and in return China would receive [insert here].

Tone and Balance
Tone is neutral.

Sources and References
The sources seem reliable and the links work. The references in the first paragraph (Chad-China Relations) don't link to the references at the bottom so that should be fixed.

Organization
I think that you should eliminate the subheading "China-Chad Relations" and move the information to "History of China-Chad Relations". The information provided in the first sub-heading is about the history of China-Chad Relations.

The line "In September 2007, China National Petroleum Corp (CNPC) reach an agreement with Chad to work together on the $1 billion Rônier Project" - should be "reached" not reach.

"The project would run 300 km of pipeline from the oil fields of Chad to a refinery built outside the capital city of N’Djamena and could allow the country to become self-sufficient for energy." - "would" not "could"

General comment: A lot of the sentences are really short and reading feels a little fragmented. In general try to mix up long and short sentences because it helps reading flow better.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation
The article should include more links to other articles so that it's more discoverable. (there currently aren't any links to other wiki articles)

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think the article is good overall. The writer writes that he has plans to add more so I assume the page will be more furnished later but the information feels a little incomplete and skewed towards information on investment development. Are there diplomatic ties between China and Chad, any important meetings? I'm also interested to read more about the defense and security relations. Looking at the comments above may also help with the flow of the wiki page.