User:Jaidajeter/Maternalism/Henshena Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JaidaJeter


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jaidajeter/Maternalism


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Maternalism

Evaluate the drafted changes
-Your article is clearly organized. I can easily see the changes you have made and they seem to be helping the article a lot. Your content and sources seem to be up to date.

-The most current time period you talk about is Post world war II, is there any more current information of Materialism taking place closer to present time? If so a section on that would be great for your article.

- The information is neutral and informative throughout the whole article.

-Something to consider is putting a sub-section in the 'post world war II' section to help breakdown all the content you are bringing into the article. Possibly group the facts about the social workers impact together. Also the lead still needs to be worked on but I saw that you were planning on fixing that.

-looking at the original article the most important thing it needs is more information, expanding on what Materialism is and the impact it had.

-Your information is cited well. I'm assuming as you work on this places where you have add this "...who simply stayed at home. p.120 (Social Work Revised)" will be cited as well.

-I noticed that you do have at least 5 sources and its possible one is from class. The only one I recognized didn't have a cite with it. The topic you chose was predominate during the time we are discussing in class so it links to our class very well.

-I really liked how you demonstrated what is from the original article and what you've added and organized your thought process on the page. I will probably use some of those techniques in my own article.

Great job so far!