User:Jake-the-dog-tattoo/Mental health/GJustVibin Peer Review

NOTE FROM COURSE INSTRUCTOR: I agree with these concerns and comments. Make sure the article is using the most recent research it can and develop it more using your own words and synthesis of these articles.

Is the content added relevant to the topic? Is the content added up-to-date?

The content and concepts are relevant to the topic at hand.

The one article was originally published in 1985, so it isn’t the most up-to-date. I also am unaware of ‘how old’ is ‘too old’ in terms of the psychology field, so it’s possible it can be considered up to date. The other article referenced was published in 2022, so it is up to date.

Tone and Balance

I would caution that the current content doesn’t have the author's own words, and it is mostly made up of quotes. There needs to  be more original words to balance the content and references.

In terms of bias, the current study references a study done in China; I wonder if it’ll be possible to find a study that supports the connection between Physical Activity and mental health from other countries? That way the information can appear as a general consensus versus limited to one geographic region.

Here’s some article to potentially look into more to start providing more information/( Could potentially use google scholar website to find more sources):

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC9082407/

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC8822691/ ( also mentions UK )

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC7559240/

https://www.asep.org/asep/asep/JEPonlineAUGUST2013_Morgan.pdf   (Australia )

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC8425532/ ( this one references UK )

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