User:JakeTayon/Adventurous motility/Givingthedeeds Peer Review

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JakeTayon, LexiKoplin, Brysonbaggs, TriniGonzales, Brooks86, Hunterbranch, QueenStarrUniverse, Kkiing08, Gfullller, JonnyBoy6989, MichaelYoung72


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 * Adventurous motility

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Beginning with the lead, it hit the main points of the article. That being said, the middle sentence is a little wordy which caused me to read for clarification.

Moving on to the content and organization, the organization feels slightly out of order. Since adventurous motility is what is being discussed, I feel that the main adventurous motility category should be a the beginning. Furthermore, history is not a bad section to include, but it doesn't seem to add to the understanding of it. Including flagella as a category feels unnecessary as the first paragraph claims adventurous motility is one that does not involve flagellum. The structural makeup was a strong piece to incorporate as it gives understanding and development of the topic.

The language used was scientific and neutral, excluding any bias and/or persuasion. I would pay attention if adventurous motility should be capitalized or not and maintain consistency as there are sections where it is capitalized and others where it is not. Overall, I feel that the authors had good understanding of the research and pulled it together well to create the wiki page.

When skimming through the sources, they all appeared to be reliable. Over half the sources were from 10 years ago or longer, so I ask if the information is still relevant. I ask because science changes frequently and quick, however, if this information is still relevant than the sources are resonable.

The image include was interesting and aided the text it stood by; I thought that was a create piece to include. As a whole this article has some great information to provide understanding on adventurous motility. With some rearrangement of the sections, I believe the information will build off itself and create a strong article.