User:JakeTayon/Adventurous motility/Msalas127 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JakeTayon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JakeTayon/Adventurous_motility?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I don't know if this is a from scratch article, but i would reduce the number of section, particularly the one sentence sections. I understand wanting to include as much information as possible but needs to be asked if putting those one or two lines is worth it. Some fat trimming needs to be done for sentences but overall it was well done and appeared neutral and informative.