User:JakeTayon/Adventurous motility/ZS010270 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JakeTayon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JakeTayon/Adventurous motility


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No current article on adventurous motility.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great layout! I love have the article starts. The lead section is a little confusing for readers new to microbiology; for those who don't know what gliding motility is, this may start out a little too detailed. Some sections of the article aren't mentioned in the lead section. Perhaps mention how M. xanthas was an important organism in the study of adventurous motility in the lead section.

Overall, you guys have a great looking article. Lots of good content. I really like how you brought M. xanthas in right after the history section. Starting off with a history section just makes sense with this article. One thing to note about the history section is that the first sentence seems unnecessary on its own. Perhaps it can maybe tie into the second like "Since microorganisms began inhabiting the Earth 3.7 billion years ago, differing forms of motility have developed over time that...".

Great list of sources, and good start on images. Keep adding more.

One thing I really like about some Wikipedia pages is their hyperlinks of topics mentioned in the paper to wikipedia pages about those topics. For example, a hyperlink could inserted for gliding motility to help the reader get a better idea of what you're talking about.

Grammar is great. Be careful of plurality throughout the paper. Ex. "flagella" in the lead section.