User:Jake 5851/sandbox

lets practice

Source 1:

There is a direct correlation between education and poverty. The  higher the  level of education one completes can directly  effect  affect personal financial security. Higher education provides the skills needed to preform at a sufficient level in the workforce. In the absence of proper education and the tools needed for success in  todays  today's society, generation after generation of students will continue to be plagued by the vicious grip of poverty.

Source 2:

Higher education is proven to reduce poverty levels, and poverty along with low income areas  effect  affect a  schools  school's ability to provide students with the necessary supplies needed to amplify their education. In addition, if education does n't not begin to decrease poverty levels soon, generations to come will face the same and likely worse circumstances. Along with that, education is important in the sense of sociability and the ability to preform strongly and think critically in adulthood. It is seen that wealth and social status are positively effected by elementary education, quality of education and critical learning. There is a great chance to break free from poverty through education. However, the journey is even harder for students who come from'''. ''' low income families in areas with high poverty rates.

Wenqi's Feedback
The information you will add is important. Ensure you provide the citation to support the claim you presented. Otherwise, it tends to be considered as personal opinions.

I make some minor editing suggestions, please see the above bold parts.

Andrew Feedback
Source 1: Your paraphrase is a good summary of the source you chose, but it might need to be looked at for neutrality. There are some claims in the last few sentences that are made but don't have data, maybe quote the original source? Last sentence specifically uses impassioned language ("plagued by the vicious grip of poverty.") and could be made more neutral in tone. Flows properly. Minor spelling and grammatical errors (preform, todays should be today's). Good paraphrase overall.

Source 2: Source 2 is good, however it seems to be focused on education in India, not the state of poverty in the US. The paraphrase correctly summarizes what is written in the source, and the source does seem reliable as it is an academic paper, but be careful about using it in your article. Your tone is neutral and should be fine for a Wikipedia edit. No grammatical errors that I can see. Good paraphrase, might not be helpful for your article.