User:Jalcar13/Sky Cubacub/Mchoe1artic Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jalcar13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jalcar13/Sky_Cubacub?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Subject's ethnicity should moved from the lead to another section, preferably to early life.

Early life section is written like a personal essay rather than an article. It should contain more biographical facts, and less personal accounts -

e,g, "Sky Cubacub (They/Theirs) is a non-binary, queer and disabled Filipinx American from Chicago, Illinois."

should be edited to

"Sky Cubacub was born in Chicago to Filipino parents in 19XX. Growing up as a non-binary and queer person..."

When personal accounts are necessary, they should be cited.

Accuracy of writing also may be an issue.

"disabilities such as anxiety, panic disorders, depression, C-PTSD, PCOS (Polycystic Ovarian Syndrome)"

anxiety itself can hardly be considered as a disability. Rephrasing the sentence should do the job.

Education and Career section has a solid start, but also stub.