User:Jalenrose8/Seattle Surge/Rmudg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JalenRose8


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jalenrose8/Seattle Surge


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Seattle Surge

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

 Lead:  I thought the lead did a good job summarizing what the Seattle Surge was and some context of how the franchise was formed. The lead also gave context on who owned the team which I found insightful.

 Content:  I think the content you added gave a lot of detail about how the team has been doing since its formation. What I did notice was that you didn't cite any sources for any of the information that was listed in the added content. I saw at the bottom of the article you had a few references which is good! You will want to site the information in the paragraph using Wikipedia's cite tool so they don't have to guess from what source the information is coming from!

 Organization: 

I thought the organization of the added content was decent. I would say to maybe make it a little more concise and easy to read by editing some of the run-on sentences. I noticed the last sentence of the content is, "The only way from here is up!". I think typically Mako has instructed us to stay away from this type of tone when editing Wikipedia articles just so the tone stays neutral. I thought all the information added was good though!

 Overall Impressions: 

I think the content added to the article does a good job of giving the history of the team as the real article lacks this content. I would make sure to add sources wherever this is new content and try to take a more neutral tone! Other than that good job!