User:JamBing/Femicide/Dtalla Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Username: JamBing
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JamBing/Femicide
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Femicide
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Femicide

Evaluate the drafted changes
I appreciate that at the beginning of the draft, the proposed changes for the article was clearly stated. The lead in the draft was unclear for me to differentiate what was added by the user from the actual article. It did however have an introductory sentence presenting the topic. I would say that the lead could be more concise and clear to introduce the article major's sections.

The content under the prevention section is relevant to the topic and I would say up-to-date. This topic is related to historically underrepresented populations- women. The user's goal to remain neutral was achieved. I didn't sense an agenda being pushed. Great job on that aspect.

I think the organization of ideas is concise under the prevention section. My only note will be to make it clear what parts are from the article and what parts are new. Other than that, I think this is a great and relevant topic and the user contribution to it will add more awareness surrounding femicide.