User:JamBing/Femicide/Wrig36 Peer Review

General info
JamBing
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JamBing/Femicide
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Femicide

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead:  I agree with the critique that mentioning "androcide" is not necessary, I'm also on the fence about whether defining gendercide is necessary, either. The article is specifically about femicide and I understand it's sometimes important to define relevant terms to differentiate for the reader, but I think more context might be needed if you are going to leave in the except about gendercide. As it's written now, it feels a bit clunky. I might write it like, "while femicide is the violent killing of women and girls, specifically, gendercide is another term more broadly used to describe the violent killing of both women and men." But again, I think it may be better to leave out both androcide and gendercide since the article is specifically about women and girls.

Prevention:  I agree that information about raising awareness and information about advocacy groups is important to the subject.

** Before talking about prevention, I would add a history portion for context. Share some historical and contemporary data, as well real world examples of femicide. I like that you are planning to identify risk factors, that seems important. More data and statistics would also be helpful.

Training:  I don't see proposed edits to the training section. This would be a good place to detail some real-world examples of training being done, whether it's effective, etc., in addition to the more general information provided.