User:JamesLhistorian/Occupational dust exposure/Taylcis Peer Review

I think that is a good idea to get rid of the example section as it is also in the introduction, feels repetitive. You did a good job at strengthening the Lead section of this article and expanding it. It feels more complete and provides a bigger picture of occupational dust exposures.

I agree that adding some common dust exposures to each occupation will help reader understand risks that come with each occupation.

I think it's very helpful you've linked all the lung diseases so readers can easily go find out more about them.

If you need more word count, for the safety section, you could possibly add control methods that each of the occupations listed above use for occupational dust exposures so readers can see what jobs have dust exposures and what they do to control for them.

Also, I would may be include more sources if you can find them just to strengthen your edits.

Overall, I think you have made some really good improvements to this article that will benefit readers, you've really expanded this article. Good job! I enjoyed your edits!

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