User:JamesS&T3530/History of hospitals/CorpusculateAggregation Peer Review

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JamesS&T3530
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 * User:JamesS&T3530/History of hospitals
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 * History of hospitals

Evaluate the drafted changes
I feel like there is room for further expansion upon in your section on 20th century integration of new technologies. Finding and adding to the "why" of the importance of the burgeoning use of medical anesthesia. There is also room for improvement in the way that this section is written, as is it currently feels like the bones for the section; like the basis to grow off of. It also seems a little strange that after each sentence there is a citation, but they all are the same citation (this is also in the antisepsis section)? I may have simply misinterpreted, but diversifying your works to cite, or consolidating what you have written into one thing seems like the way to go. There also seems a need for expansion in you section on antisepsis as it solely consists of a brief statement on germ theory at the moment. Expanding on sepsis and its treatments/prevention is what I'd recommend on working on in the future. I overall think that your article additions have the potential to be quite substantive to the article and think that, as it stands, they are all a great foundation to work on.