User:Jameshu1/Husky Union Building/Alaina.marcotte Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jameshu1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jameshu1/Husky_Union_Building?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Husky Union Building

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * You have done a great job at expanding the lead and including relevant information that gives a great overview of what the rest of the article would potentially touch on
 * You have also done a good job at keeping an encyclopedic tone throughout the whole section
 * You need to add citations/sources to your work so that it is up to par with the wikipedia requirements
 * Your lead has given you the opportunity to add more sections and go into depth on each. Adding a section on the architecture or what services the HUB offered would greatly add to your article.
 * Reread your work out loud after you finish writing it, there were some awkward sentences that just needed a word or two added to make it flow better or a period in the middle of a long sentence to split up some of the ideas.
 * Good job at linking other articles within your own article that is something I will be adding to my own work after reading yours
 * continue to expand on your ideas, adding more content, and adding sources