User:Jameststurner/Erased de Kooning Drawing/Josephrkopta Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jameststurner


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jameststurner/Erased de Kooning Drawing


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Erased de Kooning Drawing

Lead
You might update the lead (either with a sentence or two, or with a small insertion of words) to incorporate this new section that you've created relating Rauschenberg to the abstract expressionists.

Even though you didn't write this bit, a citation is needed to confirm the Jasper Johns story about putting the work in a golden frame.

Content
The new section you've added seems appropriate for this article, and balanced. I'll be curious to see what other Wikipedia editors think about whether this is the place to add this insertion, or whether it would be better directly on the Robert Rauschenberg page.

You should post on the talk page of Erased de Kooning Drawing a short introduction to who you are and what your proposed modification is. You'll probably get feedback within a day or two! Maybe you want to do so also for the Robert Rauschenberg page (Check out Jillian's comments on the Talk:Shinto shrine, and the response she got)

Organization and Sources
There are two things that are missing in your draft: you need to link to other Wikipedia pages (relatively simple); but more importantly, at this point, you need to include your sources. It doesn't look like you've posted your sources on you bibliography page (User:Jameststurner/Erased de Kooning Drawing/), so I'm not sure what you've been consulting, but especially since your proposed change is an entirely new section, you absolutely need to insert citations after nearly every sentence.

Have you consulted Bruno La Tour's essay, "Iconoclash"? (Available as a PDF on the course Canvas). That's the most up to date theoretical scholarship that I know of which might better frame the question of "is this vandalism," which exists already in the article.

Images
This will be down the line, but maybe it's worth it to put up the SFMOMA's digitally enhanced images showing the original de Kooning drawing from 2012? You need to investigate first whether this is a copyrighted image before doing so. The Wiki training module for next week on images and graphs can help with this.