User:Janbcb/Oxford Calculators/Elexis-Wohlgemuth Peer Review

General info
User:Janbcb
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Janbcb/Oxford Calculators
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Oxford Calculators

Evaluate the drafted changes
The way much of this is explained nicely. It appears the bolded information was added. The hyperlinks work and look good. However, I do not see the citations in the bottom, so I am not sure if they are in the original or not. I would go through and actually implement the ideas in your bullet points and rearrange the actual information within the sandbox. I also understand there was a lot which is why you were working through section by section. I do also feel as if in the overall article they are lacking citations in different parts I would assume are not common knowledge but I don't know if that falls under your groups problem or the original writer of this article. Somethings I wonder are how they actually got to be in the positions they all were. For example how the group formed, did they all know each other prior, did they wonder the same things and form the group. I did like the way the mean speed theorem was described, I felt like it was clear to understand. The reading itself for the most part was also pretty clear. I liked how you used some of the information from the readings that we had in class.

Response to main points on board:

The most important thing that you could do to improve the article is to rearrange and rework everything first with all your notes and additions.

In your article there were many different sections which has inspired me to set up and reshape my own article.

Peer Review Response
The two new citations that we have added so far have already been added to the official article itself on the day we did the copyedit assignment. I didn't think to include them here but I definitely should have.

I could have included more text with the reorganizing, I was hesitant due to some of the wording surrounding the assignment in class and I didn't want to break anything in Wikipedia. My plan is to do reorganize all of that so I will be including it all anyway.

I could definitely look into the sources surrounding some of the text in the article without citations but that will not be my main focus.

How the group started is a really good point. I was led to believe it was more of a "here's a group of math people that all happened to be from oxford around the same time so let's group them together" rather than a club where they all get together to do math things. I will look into this.

I will continue to work through the plans I made in my draft.

Thank you for the kind words.