User:Janellh1/John Two Guns White Calf/Therealethanmayfield Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Janellh1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Janellh1/John_Two_Guns_White_Calf?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * John Two Guns White Calf

Lead:
Content in the lead is short and suffice, providing basic information regarding the subject of the article. Intro sentence utilizes name of the person as well as his birthplace, indicating the content of the article. Intro is missing a page title which would be a good addition to further identify the purpose of the article. No summary of the sections to come.

Content:
Article is neutral. However, the individual sections of the article are small and do not have much substance. I would recommend looking at the article stub that already exists and using the already cited sources there to find more information on the topic (link to article is: John Two Guns White Calf). Most of the information present gives some slight background and is relevant to the topic, it just needs to be expanded so there is more information about this guy.

Organization:
Article is clearly divided into sections that discuss a different part of the person's life. Some of the sources are missing in the accomplishments section. I would recommend just footnoting through the article and having all the sources at the end under a section titled "references". I also think that the marriage section is necessary and can just be a sentence that is added to the introduction paragraph. There are some grammatical inconsistencies with the name of the person as sometimes "Two Guns" is capitalized while in other areas it is just "two guns".

Images and Media
Image is good, clear explanation of what image is under it. Image is not copyrighted so no issues with it.

New Article requirements
Article has 3 reliable sources (encyclopedias and books) but list is not exhaustive. More sources can be found on google scholar and the other wikipedia article posted. Most of the sources outline simple facts about the man so no differing perspectives are being offered. This might be an area that can be improved and enrich the discussion the article is bringing.

Suggestions for improvement
I think the thing this article needs the most is just some more sources. The starting point of this article is not bad as it has some basic info about the subject. It just needs some beefing up about what John did for Native Americans. The article slightly mentions accomplishments, but it mostly talks about the person's accomplishments regarding national parks, not what he did for actual tribes. The information already present is a good starting point, it just needs more. More info can be found on google scholar, google books, or just plain internet searches from credible websites. Sources that are already used are credible and good sources of information. Article does also a good job maintaining a neutral viewpoint, not taking sides.