User:Janemwestcott/Music censorship/Hana.irwin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Janemwestcott


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Janemwestcott/Music_censorship?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Music censorship

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead in the existing article outlines what will be discussed in the article efficiently, and it defines music censorship clearly. I do not think that the lead section needs to be changed. The content added is relevant and contributes to the existing article. Under the heading 'decency', information is added about religious influences on music censorship, which is important information that was not included in the existing article. Under the heading 'China', an additional and relevant example of a Chinese artist is included. Both of these additions are balanced in tone, and provide information that will allow the reader to understand the concept better. All of the sources used seem to be credible academic sources, but an account or purchase is required to view them. Overall, the drafted changes are balanced, written in a neutral tone, and add relevant information to the existing article. Additional sources could be explored that may be more accessible to regular readers, such as news sources or articles.