User:Jared Nichols 07/Bernard Ribeiro, Baron Ribeiro/Delaney barghols Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jared Nichols 07


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jared Nichols 07/Bernard Ribeiro, Baron Ribeiro


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bernard Ribeiro, Baron Ribeiro

Evaluate the drafted changes
This peer review was difficult because the Sandbox draft linked did not have any information in it yet. However, to help Jared write his article, I have read through the current version and made some notes. The article does a good job of providing a lead section that is easy to understand. It is clear who Bernard Ribeiro is and why he is a notable figure. To improve this article, I would suggest that the author provides a more clear structure as well as more neutral sources. The current article only provides a lead section and a biography. Other articles I have read split the subject's life into different sections, which would allow the author to more clearly convey his points. The sources that exist mostly come from newspapers and magazines. While the information in these sources may be reliable, there is also a good chance of writer's bias that would discredit the source. The most important thing the author can do to improve this article is add more information from scholarly sources. I think that the notes I made about this article relate to my article because it has been difficult to find scholarly peer-reviewed sources. I hope to find more unbiased sources of information to improve the overall strength of my article.