User:Jarvanc/Farewell My Concubine (film)/Jacobjia66 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Jarvanc)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jarvanc/Farewell_My_Concubine_%28film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Farewell My Concubine (film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead section is excellent and tells roughly the storyline of the movie, and the reader can very clearly get an initial idea of the movie by reading the Lead section. I think I would like the Lead section of the essay to have explained the backstory and detailed setting of the movie in detail. Students can check the original article to fill in the gaps. The content section is written in a very well organized manner. The storyline is completely based on the timeline, which is very good. Compared to the original article, Draft's elaboration about the plot of the movie is more detailed, and this part can improve the original article very well. As stated in the Lead section, I think more ideas about gender could be added. In addition, it would be better if there were more reliable sources to confirm the ideas.