User:Jarvanc/Farewell My Concubine (film)/Yuhang Zheng Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Jarvanc)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jarvanc/Farewell_My_Concubine_%28film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Farewell My Concubine (film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section is very well written. It reflects the new content added by the author. It clearly indicates the content covered in the article body. The article aims to touch upon individual’s “challenges, emotional variations, and passions” under a series of political turmoil in modern Chinese history.

The article is well-organized. It begins with the Lau’s argument on how the film is closely connected to politics. The author then provides the timeline of the story and list important historical events depicted in the film. Also, the author provides a detailed summary on Dieyi’s life. It is really helpful, but it might be a good idea to make this part a little bit shorter as the existing Wikipage of the film also include the summary. Later, the articles talks about the triangle relationship and Die Yi as a female impersonator and relevant historical events such as Japanese Occupation and Cultural Revolution.

The reference is good scholarly source. However, it seems that the author only cites the reference once in the article. For wiki project, it might be important for editors to cite as often as possible to keep article neutral in general. Also, it might be a good idea to use insert citation function. There are two references that I find might be helpful for your article. One is Art, politics, and commerce in Chinese Cinema by Ying Zhu and Stanley Rosen (part 3). The other is Women Through the Lens: Gender and Nation in a Century of Chinese Cinema by Shuqin Cui(part 3). Both are available in uvic library.