User:Jarvanc/Farewell My Concubine (film)/Zyixuann Peer Review

General info

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Jarvanc/Farewell My Concubine (film)


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jarvanc/Farewell_My_Concubine_%28film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added. It includes an introductory sentence that clearly and concisely describes the topic. The lead does not include information that is not present in the article. However, it should describe the major sections in the article more clearly.

Content

The content added is closely relevant to the topic and is up-to-date. It does not include content that does not belong. All contents are closely relevant to the topic. The article addresses one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps because it revolves around characters that are marginalized, such as prostitute Juxian, and the forbidden love between Dieyi and Duan Xiaolou, both of whom are males. In this way, the content addresses the underrepresentation of these marginalized groups, prostitutes and homosexuals. Besides, the content also sheds light on the great complexity of these characters, which could further increase the public’s interest in and knowledge about these groups, thus effectively addressing the gap.

Tone and balance

The content added is neutral. All of the claims made are very objective and not affected by the author’s own biases or subjective understandings. The content does not try to persuade the readers in favor of certain positions. Instead, it just objectively informs them about the plot and significance of this film. There are no viewpoints that are underrepresented or overrepresented.

Sources and references

The new content added is backed up by a reliable secondary source published in a journal titled Film Quarterly. After finding and reading this source, I found that the added content accurately reflects what this source says. However, the source is not very current, published in 1995. The arguments and analyses in this source are still useful for modern people to understand this film. I think more current sources could be found and added to support the content further. Some current sources will also shed light on modern scholars’ understandings and analyses of this film, which may be different from those written in the past.

Organization

The content added is concise, clear, and easy to read. There are no grammar or spelling errors. This indicates that the author made great efforts to proofread the content. However, the structure could be improved further if more subheadings are used.

Images and media

This draft does not include images that could enhance the understanding of the topic. I think images about the film and some characters could be included.

(Yixuan Zhang)