User:JasmineG17/Homosexuality and psychology/DET313205 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:JasmineG17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JasmineG17/Homosexuality_and_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Homosexuality and psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
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All I can say is that your additions to the article seem to be going well. This is definitely important information to include about Alfred Kinsey so that people receive a more well-rounded and honest interpretation of the man. However, this piece of information seems to be placed very awkwardly within this article, which concludes in a tone distinctly different than the information you've added. Although a sense of neutrality is key, it is difficult to write neutrally about incest, statutory rape, and bestiality, at least for me. It also does not read as neutral. Perhaps you can add a controversy section to the article or a subsection to the Alfred Kinsey section.