User:JasmineG17/Homosexuality and psychology/Layladye Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JasmineG17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JasmineG17/Homosexuality_and_psychology?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Homosexuality and psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
This person added more information about Alfred Charles Kinsey. The article before their changes touched on Kinsey's controversies but did not further explain. This person added more explanation without being too lengthy. They added why he was controversial as well as his most controversial interview. Though, it is bit vague on what a sex criminal is. It could be beneficial to add in a definition there. The links do work, though the reference is from a 9 year old article and written by one author. Although, it expands on what the article beforehand was talking about and this editor accurately reflected what the reference was in their work. There are no grammatical errors or spelling errors. Overall, it expands on why Kinsey was controversial but I think the content added could be improved by explaining more on what kind of sex criminals he would not report was.