User:JasmineNJ/Dutee Chand/Biancamsalgado Peer Review

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JasmineNJ
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 * User:JasmineNJ/Dutee Chand
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 * Dutee Chand

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead page:

- The lead page could be made better by providing more of a captivating intro sentence. I feel that I could see where you are going with the current edited sentence but personally I think it could use a bit more work to make me understand what the premise of the article will be.

-A suggestion I have is to start by introducing where she is from and perhaps say where she is at now? Do so in a way that links the past to the present!

- The lead is very concise and very detailed. A suggestion I have is to perhaps consider different subheadings/headers? This will make your audience member more directed to the information they are looking for visually.

Content:

- The content added is very relevant to the topic. You added information that discusses the underrepresentation of Dutee Chand.

- I do see that the chart has not been updated since 2018, I would suggest perhaps doing some research to see if she has hence earned more awards.

-Maybe you can add more information in the "personal life" section. And add more information on the year 2024.

Tone and Balance:

-In order to make room for the above you could perhaps condense some of the sections in the 2017 to present.

-The content is very neutral, I do not see anything in the article that sounds like it is trying to persuade me. I would suggest to keep the same tone going!

Sources and References:

-I see that number 4 on the citation/reference page needs some work.

-Most of the citations, are from scholarly based articles or famous trusting celebrity news outlets such as The Guardian.

Organization:

-I would suggest for you to set up the article in a way that Early Life and Personal Life are categories right after each other?

Images and Media:

-I like the images that are brought up! I do think you should perhaps consider adding some more that are not just centered on her athletic career. Maybe some more on her personal life?

Overall impressions:

-I think you are off to a great start! I think it can be improved by condensing the article and considering subheadings, adding more up to date information, and adding more about her personal life! Excited to see your final work! You have some really good content in here that you can work with!