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Article Evaluation
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- Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

Most information is relevant to the topic, however the long list of names under the double helix picture seems out of place, as it may be better its own article. I would take that picture and list of names out.

- Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

It is well-dated, however it could be added where Rosalind Franklin had gotten in her research up to this point in comparison to Watson and Crick due to its importance. What could also be added is a picture of Watson, Crick, and Wilkins receiving their Nobel Prize to emphasize how Franklin was not included and provide more visual effects that aren't distracting. A content gap that could be fixed is not including how the photograph connected to other research they had done in a more specific manner. I would add in more information about their research and how all of these parts culminated into their final DNA model.

-Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

The article is more neutral than expected, given it is a controversial argument of how fair it is that this happened. The word "nonetheless" in the fourth paragraph seems to show slight bias, however overall it seems to be strong in this point. I would remove that word in order to take a more neutral stance.

- Are there viewpoints that are over or underrepresented?

It may be over or underrepresented that Watson and Crick are guilty for what occurred. In the last paragraph, it refers to one part in Watson's book that he mentions her. Are there other comments that he has made on her? Whichever way this question is answered would have a difference in the way this article is received by the reader. I would research more into this and add whether or not there are other comments made by the Watson, Crick, or Wilkins as that could lead to many other interpretations about what they did.

- Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims of the article?

The links work well and give support to the positions of each topic in relevance to the article. They are in line with the claims that are made, as many people have made appropriate additions and subtractions of the sources and how it supports the article.

- Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noticed?

Some citations lack validity, such as articles that may show bias, like an interview with Franklin's niece. Although, it should be noted that is still a valuable source. Most information comes from news organizations or colleges themselves, which are, for the most part, reliable, given they have valid sources. As to whether or not they are neutral, bias is not expressed in the article due to any of the sources, which shows the integrity of the editors for not showing that bias.

- What kinds of conversations are going on behind the scenes?

The topic that has the most conversation about it is who took the photo, however most of this is before 5 years ago. It has since been added that Gosling took the photo. Also, someone took issue with one of the articles that is cited in that it does not say anything about taking credit away from Franklin, as the article formally had in its text.

- How is the article rated? Is it part of any WikiProjects?

The article is given the "stub" rating due to a Wikiproject rating it as such. Perhaps additions and subtractions I mentioned above would improve this. It is apart of 4 WikiProjects, one regarding Genetics, one for Medicine, one for History of Science, and one for Molecular and Cell Biology, showing its importance in these areas.

- How does the way Wikipedia discusses the topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

Although it has not been covered exactly, it follows the theme of discluding women from a lost of discoveries, such as the women in NASA that assisted in manned flights into outer space. The article clearly shows that this was the case here. Because there was not much discussion of this in class, it is hard to compare the two. The obvious difference is that there is much more in-depth information in this article compared to what we have talked about in class because we have not gotten to this part yet

- Final Questions

Where would Franklin be in her research if the information was not given to Watson and Crick? Was it a good thing that Watson and Crick received this photograph? What sources show Rosalind Franklin being recognized for her achievements?

Elisabeth Bardwell Background for choosing
- Why did you choose it? What's missing? What do you want to add?

It lacks a lot of information about her and her work, seeming that she was important in the History of Astronomy, especially being a woman. The article only spans one paragraph. It may be hard to find information on her, however there seems to be some scattered information that comes from good sources. It is also missing pictures and citations, which have been found by us and will be added. Her background and work at the university that she was a professor at will be added.

-Sources

Book: Creese, Mary, ed. (1998). "Observers, "Computers", Interpreters and Popularizers: Women In Astronomy". Ladies in the Laboratory?. The Scarecrow Press. p. 228. ISBN 0-8108-3287-9

Memorial: Stow, Sarah (1899). "Memorial of Elisabeth M. Bardwell"

Article on her impact: https://www.astro.umass.edu/sites/default/files/media/history.pdf

About her ground work for Anne Young: http://www.aavso.org/sites/default/files/jaavso/v40n1/24.pdf

Biography: https://www.geni.com/people/Elisabeth-M-Bardwell-Astronomer/6000000029383863519

Elisabeth Bardwell Article First Edits
Elisabeth Miller Bardwell (December 4, 1831 in Colrain, Massachusetts – May 27, 1899 in Greefield, Massachusetts) was an American astronomer. She graduated from Mount Holyoke College in 1866, she continued on at the college as an instructor until her death. During those 33 years, she taught a mixture of algebra, trigonometry, physics, and astronomy for the first twenty years and then only astronomy after 1886. In November, 1891 she was elected a member of the Astronomical Society of the Pacific; in March 1895, of the British Astronomical Association, and in 1898, of the American Association for the Advancement of Science. She was a contributor to "Astronomy", "Astro-Physics", and "Popular Astronomy."

- deleted citation after second "Massachusetts" due to redundancy and added correct citation after first "Massachusetts" so that it takes you to the correct link.

- removed two "the"'s in the last sentence that make for choppy grammar and distract from the point of the portion of the article

-added "at the college" instead of "there" to make it sound more professional, adding seemingly more validity for the reader of the article

Begin to Draft Your Article(March 17th)
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Elisabeth Miller Bardwell (December 4, 1831 in Colrain, Massachusetts – May 27, 1899 in Greefield, Massachusetts) was an American astronomer. She graduated from Mount Holyoke College in 1866, and continued on at the college as an instructor until her death. During those 33 years, she taught a mixture of algebra, trigonometry, physics, and astronomy for the first twenty years, and eventually only astronomy after 1886. In November, 1891 she was elected a member of the Astronomical Society of the Pacific; in March 1895, of the British Astronomical Association, and in 1898, of the American Association for the Advancement of Science. She was a contributor to "Astronomy", "Astro-Physics", and "Popular Astronomy."

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Elisabeth Miller Bardwell (December 4, 1831 in Colrain, Massachusetts – May 27, 1899 in Greenfield, Massachusetts ) was an American astronomer whose main area of study was meteor showers. She graduated from Mount Holyoke College in 1866, and continued on at the college as an instructor until her death. During those 33 years, she taught a mixture of algebra, trigonometry, physics, and astronomy for the first twenty years, and eventually only astronomy after 1886. She also oversaw the development of the observatory at the college which included invited visits to the Washington, Princeton, Lick, Berlin, and Potsdam observatories. In November, 1891 she was elected a member of the Astronomical Society of the Pacific; in March 1895, of the British Astronomical Association, and in 1898, of the American Association for the Advancement of Science. She was a contributor to Astronomy, Astro-Physics, and Popular Astronomy.

Early life
Elisabeth Miller Bardwell was born in Franklin County, Massachusetts on December 4, 1831 to Amos and Minerva (Miller) Bardwell. As a child, Elisabeth spent lots of time outside and developed an extroverted personality that led to a fearless and risk-taking demeanor. Often she could be found taking books with her when she played outside, as she was known to learn from the environment around her. Bardwell also showed early signs of being a scholar, finishing Adams' New Arithmetic at age twelve. Initially, she attended the Academy at Shelburne Falls, learning Latin and various other subjects in order to prepare her for teaching at a higher level in the future. She began teaching at age 18 at district schools in her hometown until she decided to leave teaching to pursue further studies.

At Mount Holyoke College
Bardwell graduated from Mount Holyoke College in 1866 and remained to teach there for 33 years. She taught algebra, trigonometry, physics, and astronomy. She was also the director of the John Payson Williston Observatory at the college from its opening in 1881 until 1896, during which time she oversaw its growth. Improvements in telescopes allowed her and her students to observe sunspots, lunar occulations, and variable stars. The astronomy program became a popular course of study with nearly 20% of students choosing to enroll in an astronomy class between 1896-1976 after the college introduced an astronomy major in 1895. The development of the observatory and the course itself laid the groundwork for the next generation of female astronomy professors at the college, such as Anne Sewell Young.

Publications and contributions to the field of astronomy
When Bardwell was not teaching, she was watching the sky for celestial events. In a volume of the Sidereal Messenger, she published her observations of a meteor shower radiating from the constellation Andromeda. She also published detailed observations of the Leonid meteor shower, including a chart of the Leonid Radiant in Popular Astronomy. While these observations were not new discoveries, they helped confirm which radiants meteors originated from. In 1880, Bardwell oversaw the building of the John Payson Williston Observatory where she would be the director until her death.

Death and Legacy
Towards the end of her life, Bardwell resided in Greenfield, Massachusetts with her sister. Unfortunately, her sister passed away in 1895, leading to a long period of grief for Bardwell who felt very close with her sister. Seven years prior to her death, Bardwell was diagnosed with a severe illness that she never fully recovered from. On May 27,1899, Elisabeth Bardwell passed away with one of her sisters by her side. In terms of her legacy, Bardwell is remembered as being a large part in the idea of believing in God, yet still challenging and investigating what is accepted as true. The tributes read at her memorial included:

"When I first met Miss Bardwell I stood in awe of her, but soon finding her sympathy and tenderness, learned to go to her in trouble."

"How safe I felt about everything I had committed to her care! How true she was to every interest and to every friend!"

-Additions explained

addition of new headings to separate different portions of her life for the user, including a small paragraph before the headings to give an introduction, keeping changes from First Edits assignment, also linked subjects that she contributed to at the end

- Early life additions: explains her background and where she came from for the user to have a better understanding of where she came from and how she came to be a pioneer of women in astronomy

- Time at college additions:

PLANS FOR NEXT WEEKS ADDITIONS/EDITS:

- add time at college section

- use two new sources that refer to her impact at university and how she set the groundwork for Anne Young

Set the groundwork for Anne Young:

 http://www.aavso.org/sites/default/files/jaavso/v40n1/24.pdf 

Impact at her college

 https://www.astro.umass.edu/sites/default/files/media/history.pdf 

- add picture of her with the telescope

'''-Will be adding a photo and table of contents. Table of Contents'''

-Life Work Instructing at Holyoke College Research Associations Astronomical Society of the Pacific British Astronomical Association American Association for the Advancement of Science Contributions See Also Anne Young References

Alh266 (talk) 16:10, 17 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by K8shep (talk) 14:30, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
K8shep (talk) 14:30, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * 1) WOW! You've added a lot to this article already. I'm really impressed with the sources and information you've found that add to the information about this woman, who was clearly important in American astronomy.
 * 2) I'm not sure why you removed the Miller from her first mention. Since it's her maiden name, I'd keep it in there. Remember that any deletions you make, you really need to have a good reason for. That's the main thing I would suggest here. One more is that you might add more about her work in astronomy. If you're having to choose where to add, that's where it should be. Early life and biography is super important, but just keep this in mind.
 * 3) The main things you can do to improve the article, you're already doing. It's clearly organized; you've done a lot of research; you've clearly laid out the information.
 * 4) You've done a very good job adding links to other pages already! That's super useful when you're moving to the main space. I would suggest keeping up the good work!

Response to Peer Review
Thank you for the feedback, especially pointing out that we dropped her maiden name-oops! We'll be sure to add that back in. Adding more about her work in the field is our focus now. We're hoping to find articles she published about her findings. Will look for other sources as well. Alh266 (talk)

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