User:Jassimrit Mohindru/Settler colonialism in Canada/Niamh Calder Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jassimrit Mohindru


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jassimrit%20Mohindru/Settler_colonialism_in_Canada?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Settler colonialism in Canada

Evaluate the drafted changes
The subheadings and topics are clear and concise. Consequently, it increases my comprehension of the information provided. Moving forward, putting the jot notes into complete sentences would be beneficial. As noted, the subheadings contributed to excellent organization. I like how you have incorporated key terms of the course into your Wikipedia article, like slow violence. Perhaps you could further elaborate on what slow violence is would increase reader understanding. Indigenous people are not a monolithic group. Just a question to consider: do all Indigenous groups feel this way? I thought the tone of the article was neutral and well written, especially the section on climate change. Maybe check if it is supposed to people Indigenous peoples or people. I am also unsure. Don't forget images! Images would enhance the article and make it more interesting. I think it is important to discuss the topic of racial discrimination and how it relates to climate change. So far, you have done a good job at showing the relationship between racism and the climate crisis. I also really enjoyed reading the Wikipedia article and learning more about Settler colonialism in Canada.

Reading what draft made me consider your topic is applicable to my wiki article. During World War 1, the long-term impacts of chemical weapons (the topic I'm researching) was not explored or considered. Your mention of slow violence made me think that the use of chemical weapons can be recognized as a form of slow violence because of the adverse environmental and human health impacts.

Thanks :)