User:JaxC135/LGBT culture in Chicago/Ryleeproudfit Peer Review

General info
LGBT Culture in Chicago Group
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JaxC135/LGBT culture in Chicago
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):LGBT culture in Chicago

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hey!

The sections that you guys added are very well written. I think the writing is very good at being informative and gripping, but not being narrative or persuasive. The writing is non-biased and I think adds necessary information to the article. A thing to work on would be incorporating your sources into your draft. Your sources are very good and well-vetted, but they do need to be applied to your writing. I really loved learning about Marie J Kuda and Charlene Carruthers, thanks for sharing this information!