User:JayRel23/Darryl B. Hood/Octhrift Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user: JayRel23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JayRel23/Darryl_B._Hood?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far the content added for this page is thorough. It can be made a little more thorough by not using so many abbreviations for things in the first paragraph. It is good to establish what all of those mean and then later you can abbreviate them for clarity if that makes sense. Overall the content looks like it is moving in the right direction. I would make some subheadings explaining what he's done during his career in research or academia and they contribute to science today etc.