User:JayRel23/Darryl B. Hood/Sidneyjb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JayRel23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JayRel23/Darryl_B._Hood?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- Some grammatical errors such as capitalized "professor," the dash in "neurotoxicity," and I believe there should be italics for the names of the article or book (maybe specify what it is) that he wrote: Multigenerational Effects of Inhaled B(a)P on Development.

- I think the lead is starting out well! I would add a bit more of general attributions he had as a scientist and maybe spotlight some of his successes a bit more.

- Once there is more content in the lead, ensure that there is descriptions of each of the sections to follow.

- Consider adding photos or definitely a portrait of him if possible.