User:Jaypanda95/Khao Sam Kaeo/Cwatters24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jaypanda95


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jaypanda95/Khao_Sam_Kaeo?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think that the article is pretty well constructed. The introduction explains the site, but it feels slightly all over the place because it goes back and forth between archaeological data about the site and the assumptions archaeologists have been able to make about the site but they don't always connect. I think the organization of the content makes sense, and wish that there was some information about the people that lived there, and their culture. The article does a very good job of remaining neutral and presenting the information without bias. The sources provided are diverse and modern, and have a wide range of perspectives on the site. I did see the occasional grammatical error, like a phrase repeating or a sentence that doesn't really make sense, which I assume will be fixed before the article is published. There's a lot of interesting information about the metal working and jewelry production at the site, but I think you could add more about the "technology" that was introduced here that is mentioned multiple times, as well as the "cultural connections" made through the port. If not a few sentences, at least mentioning what kinds of technological developments are being made and giving them a name. :)