User:Jaypanda95/Khao Sam Kaeo/Pengwyn00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jaypanda95, Julie Foss, and MKnightingale


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jaypanda95/Khao_Sam_Kaeo?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Khao Sam Kaeo

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The introduction/lead to your article does a good job providing an overview of the where and when of the site, as well as a basic idea of why it's important. Your lead also starts to introduce the topics of the major sections of the article that follow.

However, your lead mentions things like ceramics and stone adzes that aren't further brought up and discussed in the article. These are important to remember to add if that information is available, otherwise it should be taken out of the lead to instead focus more on the beads, metal, and glass that the body of the article focuses on.

Content

All the content in the body of your article appears to be relevant and up to date on the topic. However, you mention ceramics and stone adzes in the article lead but not the article body, making it feel like there is information that might be missing.

Tone and Balance

The content of your article seems very neutral. One phrase, however, that feels poorly backed up is, "there is clear and abundant evidence" in the second paragraph of your glass technology section. Adding information about this evidence if possible rather that just making the claim that there is evidence might help it sound more neutral.

Sources and References

You have what appears to be a good range of sources, including a good range of recent dates of publication that shows the information is up to date.

Organization

The layout of the subsections in your article is strong, and leads to a cohesive read of the article. It felt like an easy read and I understood all the information. I personally didn't notice any grammar errors, but double checking is always a good idea.

Overall Impressions

It looks like you wrote this article from scratch, so congrats! This is a lot of really good information.