User:JazGrabau/Forest ecology/CoolEditorPerson Peer Review

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JazGrabau
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JazGrabau/Forest ecology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Forest ecology

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section could be expanded to more closely incorporate the main ideas from each content section.

The first paragraph of the "Importance" section needs more sources. There are a lot of phrases like "enormously important" and "a large proportion" that seem to be unsourced. It also looks like reference 3 might not have a working link anymore.

The "Approaches" subsection could benefit from more discussion of practical approaches. Perhaps that's more suited to an article on forest management, however.

The second paragraph under "Community diversity and complexity" looks to have some grammar issues. The introductory paragraphs in this section would also benefit from some examples.

The "Ecological potential of forest species" section would benefit from a few sentences explaining why ecological potential is a useful metric - how is it used?

More citations are needed, particularly in the "Matter and energy flows" section. I see entire paragaphs without any references. The last paragraph in the "Energy flux" subsection would benefit from an example - how specifically do fires and treefalls alter surrounding biota?

Throughout the article, I see many qualifiers or filler words like "often," "sometimes," and "may." Removing these would make sentences stronger and more concise.

All of these critiques are, however, based on what is already present in the article. I also have some input on what's in the article's sandbox. I agree that the article would benefit by discussing organism interactions and different forest regions/layers. Based on this first critiquing paragraph, you look like you're going in a great direction.

I like how you expanded the information in the "Ecological facilitation" subsection and split it into two paragraphs. I do think the first paragraph needs some reworking. The third sentence is long and difficult to parse. Adding a comma after "In addition" would help. Removing "that is" and/or moving sections around to make the sentence shorter would also help. I'm also not quite sure what you mean when you write "The balance kept by canopy trees on the understory is shown..." Finally, the last sentence in this paragraph could be shortened; I don't think its necessary to reference the specific study. Something like "When canopy gaps form in old growth oak forest, for example, the population density of understory plants becomes much higher than in undisturbed forest" would be just fine. I like the direction you're going though - this section already looks much better and more complete.

Back to the main article, it looks like there is a Bibliography separate from the Reference section. It includes three sources that are also in the Reference section - but the Bibliography has a more complete citation than the Reference. These two sections should be combined. Also, the one source in the Bibliography that does not appear in the Reference section is on wild turkeys, and looks to be a citation for this sentence "For example, the wild turkey thrives..." in the "Community diversity and complexity" section. A proper reference link should be added.