User:Jbains03/Domestic violence in the United States/Lfreeman333 Peer Review

Peer Review
Jbains03
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 * Jbains03/Domestic violence in the United States:
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 * Domestic violence in the United States:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your copyedits to the article clarify the information. Your additions were clear and relevant to the topic, and the tone for what you wrote did not seem biased or seem to be an attempt to sway the reader in one way or another. The sources used were pretty up-to-date. But did not show a diverse spectrum of authors. My suggestions are:


 * I would suggest backing up all claims with citations.
 * I would suggest putting citations for each bulleted point under the section” Violence Against Women Acts” on the same line so that it is clear where the information was obtained from
 * Since the article is about the Violence Against Women Act, I would suggest not striking out the last line, “The VAWA expired in 2018. The bill to reauthorize it, H.R. 1585, passed the Democratic-majority House in 2019 but has not passed the Republican-majority Senate.”
 * I suggest removing the word “Finally” from the beginning of the added text to reduce the essay voice in the article