User:Jbains03/Homeless women in the United States/Laylagoldberg19 Peer Review

General info
Riyarajani
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jbains03/Homeless_women_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
The first paragraph provides a clearer and more detailed explanation of the historical context and contributing factors to housing insecurity and homelessness in the U.S. compared to the original.

- The first paragraph now begins with a historical reference to colonial times and the term "vagabonds" used for unhoused individuals, providing a baseline for understanding how deep-rooted the issue is.

- It mentions specific societal and economic events, such as the Great Depression and the HIV/AIDS epidemic, linking them to spikes in homelessness.

- By covering a broader timeline—from the first colonial movements to the modern origins of homelessness—the first paragraph offers a more comprehensive historical evolution