User:Jberrien23/Kleptomania/JKBrenner Peer Review

General info
Jberrien23
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jberrien23/Kleptomania
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kleptomania

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead has not been updated yet.

Content and Tone

The content focuses on a study that proposes that social exclusion increases the propensity to shoplift. It seems as though the content provides a relevant information that could go under the Cause section and it is provided in a neutral tone. Sources and References

There is only one source and while it isn't cited in the sandbox page it is in the bibliography. It seems to me that this source is credible and fits Wikipedia's standards.

Organization

I think that this paragraph is organized well. The biggest issue with it to me is the second sentence "It is known that socially excluded individuals are more likely to engage in selfish actions such as negative evaluation of others and giving up on problem solving tasks sooner." I think this could need a citation and could be phrased better. If it said "Studies have shown that socially excluded individuals..." I think it would be stronger.

Overall I think this paragraph with some modifications would make a good addition to this page.