User:Jblockychop/Lipid pump/Lingcod8 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jblockychop, JaJaBVB, Sallyllama, Leear2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jblockychop/Lipid_pump?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lipid pump

Lead

 * The lead is really well-written, appropriate in scope, and introduces the main themes of the following article. Anyone looking for a brief understanding of the lipid pump would be well-informed of its general processes just by the lead alone, which is great.
 * I think some more terms could be hyperlinked to Wiki articles, like "particulate organic carbon" or a link to an article on carbon sequestration, but it seems like the most important terms are linked.

Content

 * I really enjoyed the flow of content in this article. It feels natural, and the level of detail provided to the reader, particularly in the description of how copepods work for the lipid pump, was great.
 * I would maybe include some more additional information on the description of physical characteristics of copepods; the sentence about isomorphism and how copepod growth is scaled could use a bit more detail or context because I wasn't sure what to gather from that bit of information.

Tone and Balance

 * I think the writing in this article is impressive and the continuity of tone is something to be proud of. It feels like one person wrote all the sections, which is quite impressive. I think breaking up the Climate Impacts section into smaller subsections may improve its balance, but otherwise I think each section has a great point, is clear, and is well-written.

Sources and References

 * I think all the sources seemed to be good and relatively current. I would definitely recommend adding some more sources to the end of sentences, because some sentences can come off like their your personal views or that you're trying to persuade the reader. For instance, the last sentence of the Regional Differences section ("The rates or magnitude of these processes can vary..." doesn't have a source, which leaves the reader guessing as to whether this is objective or potentially an uncredited thought.
 * There were a few other sentences (last sentence of Climate Modeling subsection, the first sentence of that section.. and others throughout) that did not have sources and while this would be totally fine for another type of writing exercise, I think Wikipedia really requires that every bit of information included be properly attributed.

Organization

 * Again, I think the piece is very well-written. I would definitely double-check grammar and capitalization consistency as I noticed a few bits of improper grammar and inconsistencies (capitalization of Arctic not always carried through, some sources are cited before the period while others are cited with a space after the last word but before the period, etc.) but I'm sure this will be cleaned up in the coming weeks.
 * I would recommend moving the Regional Differences section to higher in the article, potentially before the Ecological Impacts section; for me, I think it would improve the flow of the article. Right now, I felt like I was too caught up in the climate impacts to care about the regional differences, and didn't see a connection between climate and those differences. If you plan to include more information on how climate impacts vary regionally, then the current flow as it stands now would work great.

Images and Media

 * I think the added Biological Pump image is great. I would consider improving the caption to be slightly more informative and to include where you got the image from, but I think it's visually appealing and in a proper location within the article.
 * Love the copepod image, I think that one is great.

Overall Impressions

 * I think it was great! You have all definitely improved the article and illuminated how the lipid pump is closely connected to biogeochemical processes. I felt like I learned quite a bit and am impressed at how much work copepods do. I think the article is in great shape.