User:Jcaldwell2/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Lead and Copper Rule
 * The article uses a lot of passive voice in the intro and synopsis paragraphs and thus is more verbose than it needs to be. It also includes many larger words, mainly verbs, that can be made much simpler. The synopsis paragraph could also use a bit more explanation and links to more of the chemistry of the lead problem as it is mentioned but not explained. I also thought there could be links out to health related articles since this rule was implemented because of lead poisoning and wouldn't have existed without that.
 * https://www.cdc.gov/nceh/lead/prevention/sources/water.htm
 * https://cen.acs.org/articles/94/i7/Lead-Ended-Flints-Tap-Water.html
 * https://www.pnas.org/content/117/38/23211
 * https://cen.acs.org/articles/94/i7/Lead-Ended-Flints-Tap-Water.html
 * https://www.pnas.org/content/117/38/23211

Option 2

 * Vietnamese people in Laos
 * The article doesn't have a strong introduction. More information should be included for readers that just want a quick idea of the topic. More can be included in the community organization as well, as school and sports are the only focus. The article only has two sources as well.
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/41056697
 * Vietnam War (to be linked in the article)
 * South Vietnam (to be linked in the article)
 * Laos (to be linked in the article)
 * South Vietnam (to be linked in the article)
 * Laos (to be linked in the article)

Option 3

 * Rufus the Hawk
 * The article is fairly good, but I would add more information about the hawk being stolen and change some sentence structures as well as active and passive voices around.
 * https://www.pri.org/stories/2012-07-02/rufus-stolen-wimbledon-hawk-returned-back-scaring-pigeons
 * https://www.pri.org/stories/2012-07-02/rufus-stolen-wimbledon-hawk-returned-back-scaring-pigeons
 * https://www.pri.org/stories/2012-07-02/rufus-stolen-wimbledon-hawk-returned-back-scaring-pigeons

Option 4

 * Onyx River
 * The introduction should include where the river ends, and ,since it includes the length of the river, the width of the river. For the environment paragraph, I would include the temperature of the water and other possible plant life instead of focusing only on animal life. In geography I would also include the river's path via map and a better description of what the river looks like. For the monitoring paragraph, what is the name of the small research center and its purpose, and what patterns and information does the United States Antarctic Program study? It might be beneficial to include a history section including how old the river is, and the erosion patterns it caused over time.
 * https://www.ourbreathingplanet.com/onyx-river/
 * https://www.cntraveler.com/story/the-not-so-winding-ways-of-antarcticas-longest-river
 * https://pubs.usgs.gov/of/2007/1047/srp/srp088/of2007-1047srp088.pdf
 * https://www.cntraveler.com/story/the-not-so-winding-ways-of-antarcticas-longest-river
 * https://pubs.usgs.gov/of/2007/1047/srp/srp088/of2007-1047srp088.pdf

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