User:Jcalle00/Epistemic virtue/Printy13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jcalle00


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jcalle00/Epistemic virtue/Bibliography


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Epistemic virtue

A quick note
You added content in the actual article as well as within a sandbox. There are some slight discrepancies in the information, so to give you most detailed feedback, I will review all of the content added. If there is a difference between content in the article and in the sandbox, I will make it clear which Wikipedia page I am referencing.

Lead
Although you have added to the Lead, it does not yet reflect the changes you have made to the body of the article. I recommend that you add sentences to introduce the new sections you added ("Foundations of Epistemology" and "Epistemic Virtues and Well-Being"). It might also be beneficial to expand in the body on the statement you added to the lead ("Virtues are generally defined by good moral character and epistemic virtues are otherwise defined as intellectual virtues").

Content
The content that you have added so far seems to be relevant to the topic, but the lack of citations makes it difficult to truly follow your thought process and evaluate this content. Here are some suggestions that I think might be useful to further develop the article:


 * You may want to add a section to further expand on the difference between virtue and epistemic virtue. After reading the sentence you added to the Lead, I was still a little confused and wanted further explanation of those concepts.
 * You're off to a good start with the new content in Foundations of Epistemology. However, I think you should shift your focus from foundations of epistemology specifically to the foundations of epistemic virtue. After doing some preliminary research, I found some scholarly sources that may be useful. Specifically, the introduction of Virtue Epistemology: Essays on Epistemic Virtue and Responsibility contains a history of virtue epistemology and may be useful in developing this section. You can access this collection online through the UAlbany Library.
 * After reading the section Epistemic Virtues and Well-Being, I'm still not sure how those two concepts are related. I recommend that you add more information to this section to explain or change the section title.

Tone and Balance
For the most part, I think you added generally neutral content, particularly in the sentence you added to the Lead. In terms of balance, I think there needs to be a few more sources added. The article, as it is now, does not represent a wide range of viewpoints. Adding content supported by a variety of sources might be good to help fix this issue.

Sources and References in the Article
Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? In your sandbox, you haven't included any references for your proposed content, but in the actual article, you added one reference to support new content. Here are some examples of where you may want to add citations:

Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? You added one citation in the actual article for new content in the Epistemic Virtues and Well-Being section, but the citation is missing from your sandbox. The link in the Notes section worked, but I could not get access to the material to compare the content. The source is published online by Cambridge University Press, but I did not read the paper because UAlbany does not provide institutional access to Cambridge Core. So, I couldn't evaluate if the cited source accurately reflected the statement in the article.
 * In the lead: "Virtues are generally defined by good moral character and epistemic virtues are otherwise defined as intellectual virtues." A citation here would be useful to show who has defined these concepts.
 * In Foundation of Epistemology section: "The foundation for epistemic virtues is epistemology, the theory of what we know to be true according to our own perception in relations to reality. Philosophers are interested in how the mind relates to reality and focuses on questions like, Do we know things? How and when do we know things and just the overall nature of knowledge." I would add a citation after the first sentence for the definition of epistemology. It would also be useful to add a reference that explains the relationship between epistemic virtues and epistemology. For this paragraph, I think it would be beneficial to add citations showing how scholarly conversation on epistemic virtues evolved from the study of epistemology.

Overall, I think it would be beneficial to add more sources. Since you have only added one source so far, you are not yet reflecting all of the available literature on epistemic virtues, and you are not yet representing a diverse spectrum of authors. On a more positive note, the source that you did include is a good start because it is current and from a peer reviewed journal.

Organization
Is the content added well-written? The new content is mostly well-written, though I had to read some things more than once to understand what you meant. Once I read the sentences out loud, the meaning became more clear. I recommend that you do this same to make your writing easier to read.

Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? I noticed a few errors in the writing. Here are my suggestions for improvement:


 * In Foundations of Epistemology, at the end of the first sentence, "in relations to reality" should be changed to "in relation to reality". Just drop the -s on relations.
 * The second sentence in that section is also a little confusing. The questions at the end do not grammatically follow from the beginning of the sentence. You may want to separate this into two sentences.
 * In Epistemic Virtues and Well-Being, you may want to change the end of the sentence depending on what you are trying to communicate. "without having the question their own personal truth" may have to be changed to "without having to question their own personal truth".

Is the added content well-organized? The added content is broken into sections, but the way that it is formatting in the actual article is a little confusing. You may want to change Foundations of Epistemology and Epistemic Virtues and Well-Being into headings rather than sub-headings.

Overall Impressions
Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article? I think you are headed in a good direction in terms of improving the entire article. The added content addresses some missing information about virtue epistemology, but the way that the new content was integrated into the actual article may not have a tremendous positive effect because of the formatting. Also, most of the content added does not have a cited source, which is a major problem.

What are the strengths of the content added? I really like that you are giving more background of the topic in the Foundations of Epistemology section. I think you should heavily focus on the history and foundation of epistemic virtues.

How can the content added be improved? In my opinion, the most important thing for you to do moving forward is to make sure that all of your added content is supported by citations. Right now, there is no way for other Wikipedia users to fact-check or find more information about most of the statements you made. This also made many aspects of the peer-review difficult because I couldn't read any of the sources for your information. You should also work on further developing the new sections by adding more information supported by a range of authors.

I look forward to seeing how you develop this article further!

-Printy13